So I feel like it's nearly redundant me commenting on your poems because I really enjoy pretty much everything you post. I really like the contrast of fruit and charcoal and I love the repetition in this. At first I was tempted to suggest you drop the final "thing" but re-reading it I think it really does work and helps to...tie everything up. I'm still tempted to suggest is maybe dropping 'up' and possibly fresh from the penultimate line, but that might just be my shorter-than-short poems obsession kicking in.
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